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Topic: Copywriting
Iphone App Description - Healthy Habits
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I am back for some more expert advice. We have launched our Healthy Habits iphone app and it is doing pretty well. However, now I have time to work on optimizing the copy that is shown in the app store. I would like to really focus on the first 3-4 lines that people see when they are browsing the apps in the app store. You can see the full copy here: https://itunes.apple.com/us/app/id416687813?mt=8#
The first three lines are all that show up on some searches so they need to stand-alone as well as work as the lead to the rest of the copy, they also display best as short separate lines like line one and two.
Currently this is what I lead with:
Name: Healthy Habits (A free health, fitness & happiness app)
5/23/11 - Ranked #1 in iTunes New & Noteworthy: Health & Fitness (US)
Changing a habit is not about thinking… it is about doing!
***** “Healthy Habits helps you put your good intentions into action!” Most of us know what we want to change…we often even know how to do it. The problem arises because we don’t put that knowledge into action.
Thoughts, comments, suggestions?
Thanks,
Jo
App website for more reference: https://www.2morrowmobile.com/HealthyHabits.php