Know-How Exchange : Website Critique

Walter -

I think people are stopping at the first page because the images detract from your credibility. What is that "addiction" image supposed to do for the visitor?

In addition, if you start at the top, as most people will, they are going to learn about the Salvation Army, its funding from Alaska, and the existence of a treatment center. So what?

Only later do you get in to the idea that the center is poorly run, and then you use inflammatory language such as "A flophouse managed like an abortion clinic."

It just all looks and sounds like someone incoherently rambling. I know you think you have a hard time organizing and presenting information, but I don't see that. You write well, and you're certainly able to get your thoughts out there.

As I mentioned before, there's still the "So what?" factor here. What is it that you want this Web site to do for you? What's the visitor supposed to do?

If you're just writing to bash the center, fine, but to what end? If you're writing because you want people to you know your story, then make it more "first person" from the beginning. Forget about the Salvation Army and its funding and all that, and get to the heart of the matter which is that you feel you were unjustly fired and denied medical benefits. Most people probably won't care that the center is, in your opionion, poorly run, but some people might very well care about Walter and his story.

I still suggest that you think about what it is that you want this Web site to do for you. I'm sure there's a cathartic aspect of this project, but I also know you have goals beyond just venting. Think about those goals, tell us what they are, and then you will probably get some good feedback as to how to get your site to work the way you want it to.

Short and long - direct feedback

Short:
You need to get someone to help you do the layout.
Hire someone. Me, the other people here, anyone - do it quickly.

Long:
It looks like you typed up whatever came to your mind and then pasted it on a webpage.
Don't have the slightest idea what you are talking about and the layout is a turn off.
The picture is a turn off.
Background color a turnoff
There have to be at least 14 different font types and sizes and formats.

Before you even hire anyone to help you work on the following:
- Title
- Headers for different areas
- Define Objective for the website
- Define what you are talking about
- Use bullets

and much more

Sorry if I was too blunt. Hope it helps.
You sure have a lot to say.