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Topic: Copywriting

Headline For An Invite To A Booth At Exhibition

Posted by Anonymous on 1/25/2008 at 3:04 AM ET 250 Points
We are a diamond jewellery manufacturing company and have booked a booth at the Jewellery Exhibition called " IIJS Signature" in Goa.

We need a headline for an invitation that is sent to the retailer buyers/ wholesalers inviting them to come and view our jewellery collection.

The current image for which we need a headline is a sky and sea merging in the background, a shell opening and a Jewellery peice (Diamond ring) propping out.

The next page of the invitation has the foll. copy :

You are invited…..

Fine Jewellery requests your presence for an exclusive sneak peek at its latest collection amidst the splendour of Goa.

Crafted in gold and platinum, it’s an endearing collection that encompasses fascinating designs, extraordinary handiwork and elegant style. This exquisite collection is ideal for every occasion and stands out due to its unique contour.

Take this opportunity to be a part of the memorable experience and get a glimpse of this inimitable collection.

Date:

At : IIJS Signature Goa,
Kala Academy, Campal, Panjim, GOA.

Booth nos.:

PLEASE NOTE :
Currently we've developed few options and did not like any... The options are...


Headline option 1:
Catch the latest trends in jewellery against picturesque Goa.

Headline option 2:
Get ready to be surprised.
Discover never-seen-before designs from Fine Jewellery.

Headline option 3:
Uncover the finest jewellery in the tranquil beaches of Goa.

Headline option 4:
Fine jewellery shores up in Goa.
And you’re invited.


Headline option 5:
A refreshing new collection from Fine Jewellery.
Now on display.

Headline option 6:
Discover the finest jewels of Fine Jewellery.
At IIJS 2008.

Headline option 7:
Amidst the splendour, discover our commitment to perfection.

Headline option 8:
Capture the opulence and splendour of nature in all its manifestations.

Headline option 9:
Amidst the scenic environs, your search for the finest just got over.

Headline option 10:
Resdiscover our commitment to perfection amidst splendour.

This is urgent and i cant think of any other creative . Can anyone help.

The objective of this headline/ tagline is to make the invite more intersting to read all the details and do look forward to visiting us to see our booth.
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  • Posted by Jay Hamilton-Roth on 1/25/2008 at 8:23 AM Accepted
    If the buyers/ wholesalers are coming to the show anyhow, then they'll probably go to your booth anyhow. Your invitation should be for something specific: a new product line that you're launching, a talk, a prize, a demonstration, etc. Your invitation must be more than "visit us" - it must be newsworthy.

    The words that you're using in your brochure are generic enough that you can substitute another company name and have it "work". Make the copy specific to your company - its history, its materials, its exclusivity, etc.
  • Posted on 1/25/2008 at 10:50 AM Accepted
    Discover the treaures of Goa at IIJS Signature
  • Posted on 1/25/2008 at 10:52 AM Member
    Sorry, I misunderstood your company name. (Is the name Fine Jewellry?)

    Discover the treasures of Goa at [company name]
  • Posted on 1/25/2008 at 11:22 AM Accepted
    I would suggest something short and reflective of your company's personality and style. Do you have a slogan or a trademark? You use or could play off that in the headline.

    It's difficult without knowing your background, but here are a few ideas:
    "Fine Jewelry in the finest of places..."
    "Fine Jewelry reveals it's latest collection"
    or if you fancy something romantic: "The Diamonds of a most praised water do appear, to make the world twice rich..." -- Shakespeare

    This is a wonderful website to jog your creativity and wordplay, with synonyms, rhymes, and even find references in shakespeare works: www.rhymezone.com
  • Posted on 1/25/2008 at 5:53 PM Accepted
    what about playing around with the word "treasure"?
    Goa is considered an exotic location. Referred to as the Pearl of the Orient.

    Discover unexpected treasures in our new collection. Discover fascinating designs, extraordinary handiwork and elegant style. Come to IIJS Signature" in Goa.

    Company Name
    Booth number
    Date
  • Posted by mdlugozima on 2/1/2008 at 11:06 PM Accepted
    Discover the latest treasure from Fine Jewellery.
    Eden has revealed its finest creation.
    Your search for perfection ends at Fine Jewellery.
    Don't be shellfish and come see us!


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