Know-How Exchange : Copywriting

Hello again, I previously posted a request for everyone to look at napman.co.uk and give your opinions that were very helpful. Now my site has not physically change but will do in appearance and format..ie, I am now going to charge a monthly subscription for my tips. Now I've been studying copy-writing and advertising methods and have come up with the following copy for my new site/same name and would like not only your opinions but to cut/copy and re-paste back to me your version.

This by no means the final version, its work in progress.

Kind regards,

Mark.


Welcome to:

Napman.co.uk
The home of winners!!

SO YOU WANT IT STRAIGHT FROM THE HORSES MOUTH?



Here, let me help you. I don't normally write ads, I'm a professional gambler but what I have for you today is so critical that I had to write this myself. I've perfected a formula that, along with Napman's daily nap, will keep you in profit every month and I mean every month. Its that simple and it works. How do I Know? Because I back my own naps every day and I cash in every month. Unlike other tipping sites I put my money where my mouth is and today the formula is ready and available to you.



PROFESSIONAL GAMBLING!


Have you considered a way to professionally bet as a second income? Well you should because you've found it here. When like me, you only bet one horse aday - Napmans nap of the day - at level stakes, your account will be in profit each month, every month. That is so long as you stick to the level stake of your choosing and you don't touch your pot/bank for 30 day's. At the end of each month you pay yourself the profit, leaving just your level stakes to again repeat the process over the next 30 days. Its so regular it can almost be classed as a second salary and only you know what you could do with that kind of extra cash.

The above formula is free but to duplicate my success you will need my one selected Nap of the Day, for a whole month which at £20 per month works out to be a very reasonable 66p per day. Given that all your naps will be @ 2/1 or above, and with a level stake of £10 it'll only take one winner to re-coup your monthly subscription and the rest of the month is your profit.

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