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Re: Question Ea/qst_question.asp?qstid=46027

Posted by chiron34 on 4/17/2017 at 3:30 AM ET 25 Points
Message for Gary Bloomer & Michael Goodman.

Reference: Q No. 46027

In acting on your advice, I took the simplest way forward as my first move. I simply removed the word 'however' from my invitation message. I sent out the new invitation as:

'LinkedIn gave me your name as a person in my sector, venture capital. We are on opposite sides of the project funding equation, so would you like to connect with me & explore how we could collaborate to help each other?'

Since receiving your advice, I have sent 165 invitations using this new invitation message and received 84 acceptances. This has increased my success rate from 27% to 51%.

I am just posting this to say a sincere thank you for your advice.

I will continue tweaking.

All the best,

Graham

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  • Posted by mgoodman on 4/17/2017 at 7:07 AM Accepted
    Two great lessons:

    1. It's amazing how seemingly small changes can deliver dramatically large results. ("Small hinges swing big, heavy doors.")

    2. The value of expert advice can far exceed the time or cost to request and act on it.
  • Posted by Gary Bloomer on 4/17/2017 at 8:29 PM Accepted
    Dude! Kudos!

    Happy to help.

    Nicely done.

    So what's next?
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