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Topic: Copywriting
Can You Improve This Sales Letter?
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1. Please critique the content and make suggestions for improvements.
2. Besides the recipient's details, should the outer envelope be printed with a message? If so, what?
Bill Cook
Marketing Manager
Sample Company
Sample Address
Bill: Are you killing off potential customers because of badly designed marketing material?
How much business are you losing because your marketing tools aren't doing their job?
Does your brochure and website look just like the competition? Is your visual branding old-fashioned and in need of an update?
Could your company logo do with a revamp?
To communicate and connect with your potential customers, you’ve got to design it right. Because if you don't, your competition is just a sideways glance away. And once those customers are gone, they're probably gone forever.
So if your packaging, point-of-sale and promotions aren’t doing their job, it's time to raise the standard. To do that, you’ll need a local design agency that can craft and shape marketing material into vehicles that will propel your business to a whole new level.
At (company name), we've specialised in creative communications for over 20 years. As experts in both business-building strategies and creativity, we've been helping clients grow their businesses using a variety of services including design, advertising, online strategies and marketing consultancy.
Want to know more? Take a look at the enclosed material for services, testimonials and other information about how we can help. Then book a Design Action Audit when we call next week. It’s a brief, no-obligation meeting to discuss your strategy. You’ll get ideas and advice on how to improve the standard of your marketing material.
But first, go online and check out the free stuff – our Design Tips for Better Business Pack, which includes:
* 5 Deadly Design Mistakes – Are They Killing Your Business? special report
* 10 Ways to Make Your Marketing More Creative special report
* A complimentary subscription to the monthly newsletter – designthinking
This $89 value is yours FREE. Just enter your first name and primary e-mail address.
I look forward to sharing a few business-building ideas with you.
Signature
P.S. Isn’t it time to give your business a boost? Either book when I call, phone or e-mail me today to arrange your no-obligation Design Action Audit, (email address; telephone number).
P.P.S. Don’t forget to ask for the FREE Better Business Pack. Register at (web address).
So, KHE's, would you book a meeting based on this letter (let's assume you found the enclosed portfolio interesting and relevant)? All suggestions gratefully received.