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Topic: Copywriting
Critique My Sales Letter.....
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Please be honest & upfront in your evaluation. I am a working sales professional & writer, so, I can take the "heat" :) I want this letter to be as tight as possible.
Some of the things I need to work on...
1. Try to create more pain, frustration & emotion in the beginning.
2. Maybe some bullets outlining benefits to the attorney (people LOVE bullets. Makes the copier easier to read also).
3. Try to whittle it down & take out all unnecessary words.
So, do let me know your feelings & ideas. It is greatly appreciated!!!
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